I LOVE NY

9 Bar Ilan Street,
Holon
April 19, 2010
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"See the World" travel agency
Company manager,
14 Halloween Street
New York.
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Dir Sir\Madam,
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My name is Crolain Aniston and I am 17 years old. I am writing this letter because I would like to take one of your tours to my home town NY. As part of my tour I would like to visit the Coronado Island, Central Park and the Napa valley.
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I would like to get some information about your tours that I might be interested in and their cost. Also, I would like to get some general information about the hotels, about the transportation and shopping areas in NY.
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Moreovere, I would like to know all about your tour guide, who has to be an English speaker, and about the flying agency.
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I would be grateful if you could reply as soon as possible, and I am looking forward to the trip to the place I was born in, NY.
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Best regards,
Crolain Aniston.

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Daphna

Looking for help?

………………………………………………………….......9 Bar Ilan street

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Station Manager,
"Galgalaz" radio station
14 Ilan street

Tel Aviv


Dir Sir/Madam,
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I am writing this letter because I would like to suggest a special program for teens in your radio station. Your radio station has a lot of interesting programs but, unfortunately, there are no programs for teenagers who need advice.
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A program which I believe would be good for teenagers is an advice program. On that program teenagers would be able to call the radio station anonymously and discuss their problems or just share their life with a professional adult. The program would be named "Looking for help?" and would host a different professional psychologist every week.
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Teenagers usually feel like no one understands them or wants to listen to them. Sometimes they are just embarrassed to talk about their real problems with their family or friends. Therefore, I believe that if the teenagers are able to discuss anonymously their problems with a professional psychologist, they will feel more confident talking about their problems.

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To conclude, I would like to recommend the new idea for a program on your radio station "Looking for help? ", which I believe could be very useful for teenagers. I would be grateful if you consider my suggestion.

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Yours sincerely

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Carolin Aniston

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Daphna

Poland

The journey to Poland is the most amazing experience I have ever had in my life. Poland is the country where 6 million Jews were murdered in world war two, "the holocaust ". The journey to Poland is an organized trip from school, which takes the Jewish students to see in their own eyes the places where the horrors occurred. It was an exceptional experience and I would be more than happy to do it all over again,

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The journey began on the February 28 at 7 am when we got on the airplane towards Poland. When we landed, we couldn't believe we were no longer in Israel. But, unfortunately, my luggage was left in Israel .I was very upset and wanted to return back home, but quickly forgot all about it and we continued with our journey. The journey took place in Kielce, Krakow‏, Birkenau, Auschwitz‏, Lublin, Majdanek‏, Treblinka, and Warsaw‏.

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I think that the hardest part on the journey was in Majdanek. Majdanek was a work & destruction camp. There we saw all the gas cabins, the crematoriums, the shoe piles and the ash mountain, where all the Jews' ashes were piled up. When I saw all the shoes, I broke down emotionally and started crying. All the places we visited made the entire delegation feel home sick and proud of our country, Israel.

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To conclude, I think that every Jewish student in Israel must go through this journey. It was definitely the most powerful experience I have ever experienced in my entire life. This experience will for ever be part of me and I will never forget it.

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Daphna

letter of complaint

9 Bar Ilan Street

Holon

February 12, 2010

Family Tours Company

Alexander 12 Street

Tel Aviv

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to complain about the organized trip to Paris which I took recently. My family and I reserved your "Happy Paris" tour, but unfortunately it was not happy at all.

First of all, I would like to complain about your tour guide, his bad attitude and lack of patience were very disappointing. Instead of being nice and courteous, he was rude and unfriendly. I have participated in a lot of organized trips my entire life and I have never seen such bad behavior from a tour guide.

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Moreover, the hotel we stayed in was horrible. The rooms were small and dusty, and the bathrooms were filthy and uncomfortable. I was unsatisfied with the meals, which were disgusting and not satisfying . Furthermore, the hotel was situated far from the center of the city, so we couldn’t do anything while we were at the hotel, we had to stay in our dusty rooms and seek for entertainment.

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To conclude, I was very unsatisfied with your service. I would appreciate a full refund for the trip or at least some compensation. I recommend you to relate to my complaints and do something with your wretched service.

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I Look forward to a prompt reply.

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Truly yours,

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Carolin Aniston

much-much better. Well done!

(95)

Daphna

Formal Letter

9 Bar Ilan Street
Holon
January 28, 2010


The "Yeled" Organization
14 Borgen street

Haifa


Dear Sir/Madam,

I visited your web-site recently and I was really impressed. I think that your organization is doing a wonderful job with teenagers. I am writing you because I would like to volunteer in your organization. I believe that I could really assist your organization.

First of all, I used to volunteer in a youth movement named "Hazav". I volunteered there for 3 years and I worked with difficult children, and helped them as much as I could. My volunteering in "Hazav" was a life changing experience for me, and I learned a lot throughout these 3 years.

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Second of all, I am very connected to children and I am interested in helping and counseling other people. I am friendly, kind and generous, so this volunteering work is perfect for me.

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To conclude, I believe I can be very useful for your organization, and you won't be disappointed . I would be happy to come for an interview.

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I look forward to your reply.

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Yours truly,

Shany Raz

This is better

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Daphna

virtual schools

What is the first thing you do when you come back from school? Well I guess some of you might say watch TV, home work . But I know that over 50% of the teenagers run first of all toward the computer. Almost every one of us loves the computer and prefers going on line instead of going all the way to school. What would you do if you could learn from your computer at home with no need to get out of the sofa? Well, this is what the virtual school is all about.

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On the one hand, the virtual school is a brilliant idea. This is just like home schooling but instead of relying on parents to develop the student's instruction, it allows the students to work with certified teachers. Moreover, the virtual school is good for advanced students. It allows them to progress in their own pace, and so they don’t get bored before the whole class moves to the next chapter. Also, researches have shown that students learning in a virtual classroom did 20% better than students who studied the same material in a regular classroom.

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On the other hand, the virtual school has some shortcomings as well. First of all, the computers are not perfect and they have a lot of problems, so we can't depend only on the computers.

Furthermore,the virtual school has all the disadvantages that exist in home schooling. For example, in a virtual school the student does not get any physical and verbal interaction with the other students.

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To conclude, in my opinion, virtual schools are a good idea. However, I think that the virtual school has to come as an addition to the regular school and not instead of it. I believe that the virtual school can add innovation to the education of the teenagers of today.

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(85)

Daphna

A letter of complaint

9 Bar Ilan Street

Holon

December 3, 2009

Ms. Gilat Simon
Principal
Kugel high school
1 Mote Gur Street
Holon

Dear Madam,

Every year Kugel high school sends a group of 11th grade students on a journey to Poland. This trip is very significant to the students, and everyone probably wants to take part in it. However, not everyone can afford to go on that trip, because of the exaggerated price. I am writing to complain about the high price that prevents a lot of students from going out on that important journey.

First of all, the journey to Poland is very significant and important, and is something that every young jew has to go through, not just the financially capable ones. I believe that this journey is one more step for a child to become an adult. Therefore, I think that the school management must lower the exaggerated price, or at least give full scholarships for the unfortunate students, who cannot afford it.

Moreover, I believe there can be another way to lower the price, by government subsidies. The government should donate a large amount of money for that exalted purpose. As a result, the school management will be able to help the students that are not financially capable of going on that journey.

In conclusion, I believe that every 11th grade student must go on the important journey to Poland, which indicates the history of the Jewish people.I also believe that the Israeli government should support financially and help lower the price by subsidization or donation of money.

I look forward to your reply.

Sincerely yours,
Shany Raz

This is much better.Great work!

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Daphna